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        托福写作干货——让分析有内容

        2018-06-22来源: 互联网浏览量:
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          在浩荡的托福备考大军中,不乏有众多的“考霸钉子户”,他们上过N多个培训班,考了很多次,但成绩仍没有实质性突破。作为托??际灾鞴劭疾榈囊桓龅ハ?,写作一直以来都是广大学生的难题,今天啄木鸟就拿托福独立写作作为例子告诉你为什么的你的托福写作一直考不出来。

          上过培训班的学生想必都学过各种各样的理论、方法并背过一些漂亮的词汇和句子,但是为什么我们的作文分数始终不能提升?总是在22/23分左右徘徊?我们学会了审题,学会了怎样去想出足够的合理的分论点,怎样去设计文章的总体框架以及每一段的内部结构,也学会了如何用不同的方法来证明一个分论点,为什么作文还是那么多分?不上不下,甚至忽上忽下!

          独立写作其实是一个学生思维过程的体现,在这个过程中,我们需要针对一个话题去体现我们的深度分析能力和逻辑推理能力。我看过一些学生的作文,他们掌握了基本的框架和方法,比如用分析因果,对比论证,举例子等去证明一个观点,段落的基本条理和框架都不错,但是我们不妨回头看看我们写的文章,你的段落内部的每一个小的part写的够“精”吗?

          我们来看一个例子(from one of my students):

          Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

          When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

          Position: agree

          (主体段一):To begin with, team members will help students address some problem which they cannot handle it by themselves. When students do some homework, they will definitely face a lot of difficulties and challenges. If they work in a group, they can corporate with others, and other students who can handle the problem can teach them how to manage this problem. So not only can students address this problem quickly, but also they can learn how to fix up similar problems. By contrast, if a learner work alone, when he faces a problem, he have to do some researching to find how to find the method to solve it, which will consume a plenty fo time. what is worse, he maybe cannot find a answer by himself, and he has to ask others.

          我们暂且不考虑这一段的拼写及语言错误,学生的基本的语言能力还是比较不错的。不过,这一段的文章其实也就在23分左右了(样本评估),这一段中,学生主要采用了原因分析和对比来证明段首的观点,基本的框架和方法他学到了,但问题是什么呢?

          1、 观点句不明确

          整段文章其实讲的就是一个efficiency,所以观点句最好围绕efficiency这个词去写,可以写成,Working together on an assignment promotes efficiency。观点句作为总领句,必须一步到位,让读者看到这句话就知道你这一段想表达什么意思,中心词要突出。

          2、 不够精

          虽然解释原因或者对比论证相对于例子来讲都属于一般性的分析,但是如果像这个小作者这样的分析就会显得比较空,分析的时候我们其实也可以提供细节。

          “When students do some homework, they will definitely face a lot of difficulties and challenges. If they work in a group, they can corporate with others, and other students who can handle the problem can teach them how to manage this problem. So not only can students address this problem quickly, but also they can learn how to fix up similar problems”。

          就拿这一部分来讲,其实我的学生并没有分析到位,重点要分析为什么cooperation会让我们更加高效地解决问题?需要解释出细节。比如:

          It is widely acknowledged that different students have distinct ability, specialty, methods, and perspectives of analyzing a particular problems. Therefore, they can divide certain assignment into different part and steps like planning, searching information, supervising and conducting, etc according to their respective advantage. Undoubtedly this will make them able to finish the assignment more quickly minimizing the possible errors on each step.

          结束语

          大家可以对比这一下这两部分论证,哪一部分更能体现我们的分析能力呢?所以大家在作文这一部分一定要粗中有细,精益求精。心有猛虎,细嗅蔷薇。



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